Entry 6 well written paragraph


There ara certain cultures, such as chinesse, in which the essays are longer than others such as the English culture. the main characteristcs are: to begin with, the 
TOPIC SENTENCEclarified the subject
                                       what we are going to talk about in the following paragraphs 
                                      opening sentence should be an interesting topic to catch the attention    NOT be detailed, breve, clear and presice. The topic sentence lead the reader to into the points that the writer is going to make , to clear up the idea. 

 After it , comes the BODY: this is the heart of the essay which  supports the topic with arguments. It gives more information and the order will vary according to two different criteria; a) importance: standing out arguments  b)chronology: order of the events. 

  Finally, the CLOSING SENTENCE: this sentence re-state the topic and add something else. The main goal is to keep the audience thinking.

webform topic sentences

Choose the best among the several topic sentences for each paragraph below.
1. I saw around Velva a release from what was like slavery to the tyrannical soil, release from the ignorance that darkens the 
soul and from the loneliness that corrodes it. In this generation my Velva friends have rejoined the general American society 
that their pioneering fathers left behind when they first made the barren trek in the days of the wheat rush. As I sit here in 
Washington writing this, I can feel their nearness. (from Eric Sevareid, "Velva, North Dakota")

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The answer Many politicians deplore the passing of the old family-sized farm, but I'm not so sure. is correct.
Sevareid argues that farming is destructive as a way of life, no matter what romantic notions are attached to it
. He is not writing about the 
productivity of farms, about his own life story ("I grew up on a family-sized farm..."), and his main point is not 
that people moved away from the cities in the late the nineteenth century.

2. The first is the wear-and-tear hypothesis that suggests the body eventually succumbs to the environmental insults of life. 
The second is the notion that we have an internal clock which is genetically programmed to run down. Supporters of the
 wear-and-tear theory maintain that the very practice of breathing causes us to age because inhaled oxygen produces toxic
 by-products. Advocates of the internal clock theory believe that individual cells are told to stop dividing and thus eventually
 to die by, for example, hormones produced by the brain or by their own genes. (from Debra Blank, "The Eternal Quest" [edited]).

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The answer There are two broad theories concerning what triggers a human's inevitable decline to death.
 is correct.
This paragraph is a straightforward description of two possibilities, neither of which is preferred over the other.
 In this case, it would be wrong to mention only one of the possibilities (the "internal time clock") in the topic 
sentence, or to treat it as a philosophical discussion of death itself ("we all must die..."). As for the biology 
professor, He or she might very well have given an interesting lecture, but that has nothing to do with the 
content of the paragraph.

3. The strictest military discipline imaginable is still looser than that prevailing in the average assembly-line. The soldier, 
at worst, is still able to exercise the highest conceivable functions 
of freedom -- that is, he or she is
 permitted to steal and to kill. No discipline prevailing in peace gives him or her anything
 remotely resembling this. The soldier is, in war, in the position of a free adult; in peace he or
 she is almost always in the position of a child. In war all things are excused by success, even 
violations of discipline. In peace, speaking generally, success is inconceivable except as a
 function of discipline. (from H.L. Mencken, "Reflections on War" [edited]).

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The answer We commonly look on the discipline of war as vastly more rigid than any discipline necessary in time of peace, but this is an error. is correct.
The topic sentence must emphasise the comparative nature of the paragraph. Mencken does argue that soldiers need discipline, but this is
 not all he argues in this paragraph. Likewise, while soldiers may well serve an important function in wartime, and while they may well be able to 
compete well in peacetime, neither of these points is discussed in the paragraph.

4. In Montreal, a flashing red traffic light instructs drivers to careen even more wildly through intersections heavily populated 
with pedestrians and oncoming vehicles. In startling contrast, an amber light in Calgary warns drivers to scream to a halt on 
the off chance that there might be a pedestrian within 500 meters who might consider crossing at some unspecified time within
 the current day. In my home town in New Brunswick, finally, traffic lights (along with painted lines and posted speed limits) do 
not apply to tractors, all terrain vehicles, or pickup trucks, which together account for most vehicles on the road. In fact,
 were any observant Canadian dropped from an alien space vessel at an unspecified intersection anywhere in this vast land,
 he or she could almost certainly orient him-or-herself according to the surrounding traffic patterns.

Good Work!

The answer Although the interpretation of traffic signals may seem highly standardized, close observation reveals regional variations 
across this country, distinguishing the East Coast from Central Canada and the West as surely as dominant dialects or political inclinations. is correct.
It is not enough simply to list all of the arguments in the paragraph ("People in Montreal drive faster..."), or to pick only one point to hilight ("People
 in Calgary are careful of pedestrians"). Instead, the topic sentence should highlight the interpretative nature of driving habits and their regional variations.
 Since the paragraph stresses the differences among drivers in different parts of the country, it would be entirely wrong simply to state in the topic
 sentence that "Canadians do not follow traffic signals properly."


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